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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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it is irrefutable that economic progress is one yardstick for determining a
country
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's success, but there is a range of other non-economic factors
such
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 as Literacy
Rate
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 (LR), Infant Mortality
Rate
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 (IMR),
Life
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 Expectancy at birth LEB), and Environment Performance
Index
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 (
EPI
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), which can be
index
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 (
EPI
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), which can be used to judge the well-being of a nation.
This
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 essay shall delve into all
such
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 factors and
also
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 pick out the most significant one. Economic progress, or
in other words
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, the
GDP
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 has traditionally been the benchmark for determining the growth of a
country
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. The true
measure
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 of accomplishment,
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, is to determine how much of
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 economic growth is reaching the weakest sections of society. A successful
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 of development should represent the
life
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 of an average person in a
country
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. It should
measure
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 the quality of
life
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 of all citizens. One important factor is the Literacy
Rate
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.
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, a
country
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 like Cuba has low
GDP
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 but less than 1% of its population is illiterate. As a consequence, there is less crime and
hence
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 people enjoy a peaceful existence. Another factor is Primary Health Care.
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 can be judged by the Infant Mortality
Rate
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, and the
Life
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 Expectancy at Birth. If people receive good healthcare at the primary level, they are happier. Their productivity of work increases, and they lead a comfortable
life
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.
Furthermore
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, the Environmental Performance
Index
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 (
EPI
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) is
also
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 an
index
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 of mapping success.
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, Costa Rica has a low
GDP
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, but its people are considered to be the happiest in the world.
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 is perhaps because it ranks 5th in the world in the
EPI
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. Summing up, the 'Literacy
Rate
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' is the most important factor to
measure
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 the success of a nation.
GDP
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 is just a mathematical value and does not take into consideration many of the factors that affect a person's well-being and
thus
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 a nation's wellbeing.
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  • technological innovation
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