In the past few years,
people
developed medicine very well. Now is much easier to get
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treatment. Since
prevention
is much better and cheaper than
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, a lot of
people
agree that spending money on
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and
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is unnecessary and it would be better to invest money in preventative measures. I strongly agree with
this
view, because
people
can avoid dangerous
diseases
.
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and foremost,
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of disease
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on
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lifestyle and self-care.
People
eat healthy food and regular go to
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or do some exercises,
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give
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example and motivate them to become better.
this
will prevent some
diseases
like
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or others.
Moreover
, parents give healthy food to their children and encourage them to do exercise or play
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like football or basketball, which
also
will have
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effect on there’s health.
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of disease
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as well. It is obvious that
prevention
is way better and cheaper than treating
diseases
,so it will be easier for doctors and
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, as they will not spend a lot of money to create new medicaments and
then
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price.
For
it is much earthier to eat
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amount of calories and do exercises, rather than struggle with
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or diabetes.
To sum up,
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society should prevent
diseases
rather than cure them, as it will be better, cheaper and easier. As a firm believer
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this
approach, I suggest that
people
should invest in preventative measures.