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In most elementary and high schools in Asia, students are required to wear uniforms. What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing school uniforms?

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Wearing
school
uniforms
 has become a traditional activity in elementary and high
school
over
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 Asian countries.
This
 essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages. On one hand, wearing
uniforms
 creates a positive environment in
school
,
consequently
, it promotes equality and discards bullying. Wearing the same dress at
school
 reduces economic inequality and the competition among children to show off their trendy clothes. There will be less neglect and
students
 will not try to keep up with fashion. Following some social experiment results, mandatory dress codes have been proven an effective method to reduce bullying. On
other hand
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,
standardize
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uniforms
 may not be fit
to
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for
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 all
child
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children
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especially
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 obese kids. Another issue is that
students
 may get tired of wearing the same
color
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everyday
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. In some cases,
students
 may not recognize their friends from the back,
in particular
 male learners.
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,
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Asian children are of similar height and hair
color
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,
hence
, they are easily mistaken for each other.(*) In conclusion,
uniforms
 make it easier to maintain discipline at
school
 and create an atmosphere of equality. Enforcing a rule that requires
students
 to abide by
dress
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the dress
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 code has more advantages than disadvantages.
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