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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks

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Nowadays, more
students
 choose to study abroad than ever before. There are benefits
in
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 studying in a foreign
country
;
however
, there are some negative factors as well.
First
 and foremost,
students
 will meet a higher quality of training. In their own
country
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 the study is based on paperwork while out of
nation
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the nation
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 it is almost based on practical form even with many social experiments to fill up their knowledge application.
For example
, in
the
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 developing
country
, the learning is totally in written form because of
lack
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 of teaching equipment, the
students
 are not able to learn correctly nor understand how a theory will work in practice. In foreign nations, they are taught practical mostly
instead
 of repeating the theories in their mind.
Besides
,
students
 will have a chance to meet new friends who come from many different cultures over the world. It is extremely helpful for young learners in their future career path that surely
meet
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 many kinds of working performance in the current flat world presently. The overseas learners will possibly gain extensive experience in the field of their subject much more than their counterparts who are studying in their
country
.
On the other hand
, relocating to a new place has its own drawbacks. One of them is the
students
 get a feeling of isolation as they are away from family and friends while they are confronted with new surrounding social conventions. In case of
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feeling
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 well, there is no one to take care of
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 maybe shock with new local culture.
For instance
, Asian
students
 who come from Confucius culture will face strong and open Western figures, especially in costume and communications.
However
, the strong individual may cross over the difficulty and may broaden their horizons in the short future. In short, I believe that getting qualifications in foreign nations overweighs its drawbacks as education abroad gives a good chance of being an advantage academically as well as practically.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cross-cultural understanding
  • Specialized courses
  • Personal growth
  • Financial strain
  • Tuition
  • Cultural differences
  • Isolation
  • Homesickness
  • Educational systems
  • Academic performance
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