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Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negetive development?

#people #face #negetive #development
It is true that
people
 now choose virtual socializing over physical.
However
, there are a lot of reasons that could account for
this
 trend. In my opinion, it is a positive trend and my reasons will be
subsequently
 discussed. To start with, the invention of the
internet
 has made sustaining
relationship
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 over a long distance achievable. The whole world has been turned into a
gobal
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global
 village making the fear of working in
a
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one part of the globe and having
love
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 ones on the other a norm. Different applications have been developed around
this
 purpose,
this
include
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 video
call
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, voice over
internet
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 and
internet
 chatting applications.
This
 does not leave out finding
love
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 ones over the
internet
. My niece that just got married
few
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day
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 ago met her husband
on
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 the virtual space, their
love
 story is remarkable and they are happy together now.
Furthermore
, professionals now do job collaboration over the
internet
. The virtual space has made staff working together without having to see one another a reality. So, companies can have staff across different states and continents and they can all come together to solve a particular problem without coming under the same roof. A good example was during the Covid-19 pandemic when
people
 have to avoid physical contact, if not for the
internet
, a lot of
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companied
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 and
people
 might not have survived.
People
 have to work from home and sent their jobs electronically. Conclusively, the virtual place is a gift to keep the world going.
People
 meet
love
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 ones as well as sustenance for livelihood over the
internet
. It is a good trend.
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