Some claim that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Everything has two sides and competition between
men
and
women
is not an exception. In the ,past it seemed that most people
besides
men
in everything but today many people criticize it .  We must acknowledge that
women
have responsibilities to do
such
as at work and at home. That gives them a good chance of doing many
things
at the same time. Working at many places , helps females to do many
things
and gives them the powerful chance to help others
men
at work. Some researchers stated that
women
as the same as
men
in our lives.
For example
,
women
can take many workers to do at the same time as
men
.
Nevertheless
, many people believe that
men
should be done everything for
women
. There are many proven scientific approaches that produce good results about the nature of the male.
Men
think of the huge
things
that
women
could not have the ability to take it .
For instance
,
men
have the ability to move any
things
heavy .
In addition
,
women
need
men
at very times because they can not do any
things
without them. In conclusion, I trust that
men
mentally have a great nature than
women
to help others as I can not do
things
on my own.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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