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Some claim that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#men #women
Everything has two sides and competition between
men
 and
women
 is not an exception. In the ,past it seemed that most people
besides
men
 in everything but today many people criticize it .  We must acknowledge that
women
 have responsibilities to do
such
 as at work and at home. That gives them a good chance of doing many
things
 at the same time. Working at many places , helps females to do many
things
 and gives them the powerful chance to help others
men
 at work. Some researchers stated that
women
 as the same as
men
 in our lives.
For example
,
women
 can take many workers to do at the same time as
men
 .
Nevertheless
, many people believe that
men
 should be done everything for
women
. There are many proven scientific approaches that produce good results about the nature of the male.
Men
 think of the huge
things
 that
women
 could not have the ability to take it .
For instance
,
men
 have the ability to move any
things
 heavy .
In addition
,
women
 need
men
 at very times because they can not do any
things
 without them. In conclusion, I trust that
men
 mentally have a great nature than
women
 to help others as I can not do
things
 on my own.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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