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In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘’anyone can do it’’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?

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"Any can do it"; Everything is possible in
this
 world. Some communities believe that genuine
talent
 is not a required thing to become rich and famous in the arts meanwhile genuine
talent
 has important in
this
 world to be successful in their life. In
this
 essay, I will discuss
this
 matter and
then
 I will give my opinion on
this
 matter. On the one side, Genuine
talent
 will never spoil the life of any person. Genuine
talent
 has its own importance and builds a significant career.
People
 with
talent
 will be strong and express their views naturally. Nowadays, multiple TV shows are being conducted around the world to filter the
people
 with real
talent
.
For instance
, ETV in India is one of the famous channels where Telugu singers are filtered. And another good example is, India's Best Dancer is one of the best dance shows to know the
talents
 of the best dancers. On the other side, Without
talent
 in arts, most
people
 are getting settled well due to their glamour and influence on society.
For instance
, In Korea, there are many dancers and singers who have importance in society based on their outlook and fame but not on their
talent
. Without genuine
talent
, these
people
 are becoming famous and getting settled well in their life. To sum up, In my view, Both talented and untalented
people
 are getting famous and building their careers in the arts. But genuine
talent
 has great importance and
people
 in society have an admirable opinion of their
talents
. Genuine
talents
 will never be replaceable with other
talents
.
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