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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks

#students #study #colleges #universities #country
The pie chart compares the proportion of
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 types of Anthropology
graduates
 who completed their undergraduate degrees. The table chart illustrates the wage of
graduates
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 and shows the percentage of different kinds of employment. It is clear that over a half of
graduates
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 job, whereas people who had
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part time
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job
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 and unemployment accounted for 15% and 12% respectively. And the figure for
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 and postgrad study had the least percentage of all
graduates
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 at 5%. For the comparison of salaries from different types of
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, it is obvious that the
graduates
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 students who
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 in
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 sector with the highest proportion of earning over ten thousand dollars.
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, anthropology
graduates
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 in private companies had the least percentage of making 10,000 dollars per year, with only 30 %. There is a similarity between freelance consultants and government
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, which kept the same proportion of
graduates
 who earned from $25000 to $74999, at 5% and15% respectively.
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  • opportunities
  • personal growth
  • development
  • exposure
  • diverse
  • perspectives
  • language skills
  • job prospects
  • adapting
  • environment
  • financial considerations
  • costs
  • homesickness
  • social isolation
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