The only way to ensure road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offences. To what extent do you agree?

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deter
reckless behavior
psychological deterrence
adhere
penalties
awareness campaigns
knowledge and skills
technological solutions
advanced safety features
automatic braking systems
lane departure warnings
traffic surveillance
enforce laws
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The only way to ensure road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offences. To what extent do you agree?

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