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The only way to ensure road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offences. To what extent do you agree?

#road #safety #punishments #offences
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people
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drives
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car
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 are becoming
people
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, who
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drives
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 a vehicle very fast and other
people
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 are staying
under
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the
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danger. I try to give a solution to
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 issue below.
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I agree
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I'm
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 agree with that.
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year
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cars
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 are becoming very fast and modern. Lots of affluent
people
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drives
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drive
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a
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apply
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super
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car
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 on their lives because of
traffic
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. Before that, they'd heard about
laws
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 of the ways. A lot of motorists want to
drive
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 a
car
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at
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 safe roads. If the
government
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 puts a lot of stricter
and
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traffic
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 wardens
to
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on
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 roads,
people
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 will
drive
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 a
car
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 according to
laws
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.
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, in Dubai,
people
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drive
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car
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 according to
laws
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. Because, if they
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 a
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in
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higher
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a higher
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 speed, they have to pay lots of cash to
traffic
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 wardens or
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government
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the government
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. If you claim
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 cash twice or more, you can buy a normal vehicle to
drive
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. Amazingly, If
people
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drive
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car
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the car
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 out
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of laws
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laws
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 and won'
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 pay kinda taxes,
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government
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 will get the
car
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 and don'
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 gives
back
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it back
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. But in Uzbekistan,
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
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 (without Tashkent citizens)
drive
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cars
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 very fast.
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 for everyone who
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across the road.
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traffic
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 lights.
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 the other hand,
people
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 innovated
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electrocars
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electro cars
.
The modern
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electrocars
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electro cars
has
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a
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 important option. The
car
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 will direct
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itself
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it self
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 by switching on automatic options. Interestingly,
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electrocars
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electro cars
 don'
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emitsand
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emits and
emits
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useful
usefull
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useful
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people
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 health. Motorists don'
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 hear any volumes and voices. Because
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electrocars
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electro cars
 are very
peacefull
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peaceful
. In the
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 to
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people
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 innovated a system and the system has
a new options
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a new option
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.
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 is you can talk to your
car
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 is
car
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 directs itself according to
laws
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.
Electro
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cars
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knows
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 maps and can see the road view and illustrate on the monitor.
People
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 who want to protect
the
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nature ought to
drive
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electro
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cars
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. In conclusion,
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government
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the government
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 should announce a high paying
stricters
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stricter
 (kind
a
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of
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 taxes) and produce more
electro
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cars
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. In my opinion, the
government
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 ought to produce more
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electrocars
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electro cars
instead
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 of
stricters
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stricter
. If
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everyone
everyon
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everyone
drives
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electro
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car
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 everyone will be healthy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • reckless behavior
  • psychological deterrence
  • adhere
  • penalties
  • awareness campaigns
  • knowledge and skills
  • technological solutions
  • advanced safety features
  • automatic braking systems
  • lane departure warnings
  • traffic surveillance
  • enforce laws
  • socio-economic impact
  • disproportionately
  • broader social issues
  • community engagement
  • road safety culture
  • collective responsibility
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