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Schools in some countries require their students to wear a uniform. What are the positives and negatives of this rule?

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In these
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 days,
rules
 that oblige pupils to wear
uniforms
 are quite common in a lot of
schools
 around the world. Where present, these requirements come with various effects ranging from positive influence on the learning environment to negative impact on the development of young people. Traditionally, the requirement of imposing
the
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 single style and colour of clothes in
schools
 has been serving the purpose of creating the appropriate atmosphere for studying. For children, it is important to see and feel that school is different from home, where there are no
such
rules
.
In addition
 to that, diverse outfits may attract attention when it is necessary to focus on lessons. Especially teenage boys are likely to get distracted by their female classmates wearing nice dresses, which could happen during the most important classes. Just forcing everyone to wear the same rectifies
such
 adverse effects and makes the learning process more productive. In the
last
 decades, the downsides of
uniforms
 have become more apparent. As personal individuality is becoming culturally more important, some people start noticing that in some ways
schools
 are teaching children the opposite. With the enforcement of uniform clothes, neither are students taught to appreciate each other's differences nor is the educational process being kept sufficiently entertaining. It is not surprising that pupils in
schools
 without strict outfit
rules
 are on average more creative and bright when they graduate.
Uniforms
 suppress individuality and creativity, which perhaps was not important in the past, but is a major issue today. In conclusion, valid arguments can be made both in favour of school
uniforms
 and against them. In the future,
further
 social progress should define whether
such
rules
 still have
right
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 to exist.
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