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Many men and women are making the decision to have children later in life. Why is this trend occurring? What are the impacts of this development on both family and society?”

#men #women #decision #children #life #trend #impacts #development #society
Years ago, it was common that young people
get
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 married and be parents
in
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their
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 young
age
.
This
 is no longer the case, in present days many
women
 are hesitating to be pregnant.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons behind and how households
as well as communities
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 are affected.
To begin
 with,
this
 trend is apparently rooted
from
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 financial burden and more importantly, negative influence on the birth giver’s form. To be more specific, after bearing a child, the mother's physique is badly affected, it can even
last
 for a long time.
Hence
, numerous
women
 nowadays are postponing their motherhood. Considering the other cause, bringing up a
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newborn
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new born
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newborn
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baby
 to a youngster,
such
 a remarkable budget would have to be spent. As the
baby
 is born, various factors including clothes,
nutrition
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and nutrition
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 are heavily concerned for couples. It is clear that men and
women
 who are young, have not been able to earn adequate income, are
balking
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 to have
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a baby
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baby
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babies
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.
Consequently
, the impacts
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 that reality are unavoidable,
for
instance
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 health issues happen to older
women
 giving birth and lack of young labour. When a female
make
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 her decision to be
mother
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a mother
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 at the
age
 of 30s or even older, it would facilitate physical problems to arise.
Researches
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Research
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 have shown that the ideal
age
 to have
baby
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a baby
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 for
women
 is between 25 and 30, as long as they are in good health and physical condition.
Otherwise
, diabetes and high blood pressure are among the diseases that have
high
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 potential to occur. In regard
of
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social
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a social
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problem
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problems
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, unless females give birth at
early
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age
, there
are
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 no prospective
aging
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ageing
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 labour generation which paves the way
to
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for
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shortage
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a shortage
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 of young employees in enterprises. To conclude, there are several reasons explaining why couples delay parenthood, and
this
 can have impacts, mainly negative. Given the fact that society is continuing to adapt, the trend is unlikely to stop in the future.
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