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evaluation of 3 different teams' score over 4 seasons

The given bar chart illustrates the
points
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 gained by three different
teams
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 over four different seasons. Overall, it is evident that
team
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B
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 remained in scores than the other two
teams
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 A and
C
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. At the beginning of the period, the
score
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 of
team
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C
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 was twice the
score
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 of
team
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 A, which was 10
points
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, while
team
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B
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 is marginally ahead of both
teams
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 with a
score
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 of 82-
points
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. In season 2003, a small decline in the
points
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 of
team
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B
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 was observed
in
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relative to
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year
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the year
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 2002, which
was
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stood at 60
points
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.
On the other hand
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,
a
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little progress was shown by both
teams
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 A and
C
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, their
points
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 were 11 and 15 respectively. In
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year
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the year
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 2004,
team
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B
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B's
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score
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was
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dropped from 60 to 43
points
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, while
team
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 A had shown
sharp
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a sharp
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 increase in
points
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. In the same
season
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the
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team
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C
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C's
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score
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 was 12
points
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, which is lower than the previous
year
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.
Similarly
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, in
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year
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 2005, both
teams
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 A and
C
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 showed bad performance by gaining scores
8
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of 8
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and 5
points
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 respectively. It can be seen that an increased behaviour had observed in
team
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B
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B's
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score
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 which was 55
points
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 greater than 43
points
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 in the previous season. To sum up,
the
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team
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B
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B's
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 performance remained
outstanding
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more outstanding
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than
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over
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 others during the four seasons.

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