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We are living in a 'throwaway society'. Discuss the causes and problems.

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Nowadays, we live in a materialistic society and it increases the chances to follow the habit of using and
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.There are several reasons that lead to
such
 kinds of situations
like
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 modernization and urbanization. In
this
 essay, I will be discussing these reasons in detail and all possible problems
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caused by them.
Firstly
, modernization has made life more competitive among the
people
 ,especially
people
 who work. Both gents and women find it difficult to maintain house chores and have high financial stability,
as a
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 they end up buying more appliances that could ease their job.Even if they are broke,they think that repairing and reusing them is a waste of money and unworthy.
Secondly
, a sudden rise in urbanization promotes the rapid growth of entrepreneurs.
Therefore
 ,it is not difficult for
people
 to get what they want.At present, a large number of products are available in the market even at the cheapest rate.
This
 makes
people
 purchase and store more and more unnecessary things. To illustrate, most Indians now use a lot of electronic gadgets like dishwashers and washing machines ,once they stop working these
people
 would purchase new ones without giving
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second
 thought.
This
 helps to the boom of new companies. The main problem caused by
this
 throwaway society is environmental pollution like water ,air and land pollution. There is no proper process for recycling or burying products
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made up of plastics or fibres. For these reasons,it would make life harder on
this
 planet. Another problem is that
,
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 the rising demand for materials may create a corrupted society. To illustrate, unlike in past times
people
 use matching shoes for attire ,knowing
this
 trend a lot of companies make shoes of bad quality. To sum up, environmental pollution and illegal activities are being grown by the competition of
people
 to buy new things each and every day.
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