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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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 era, as technology is boosting,
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that means of transportation will
also
 change their mode. In the coming decades, all kinds of vehicles will be driven mechanically rather than manually. Without any
driver
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 people will commute from one place to another desired
destinations
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. In my
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 disadvantages are prevailing
instead
 of advantages. In
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further
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advantages, how disadvantages are more, will be discussed. On the one hand, thousands of people are financially
dependant
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 on their jobs of driving especially in
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developing countries,
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 become incomeless because of self-driven trucks and buses.
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installation of high technology machinery and the whole GPS system will ultimately
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 in high prices
of
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 private as well as public automobiles.
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, according to the survey that was organised by KIA motors 80%
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 of the motor vehicles have
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increased after the introduction of
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 features of driverless cars.
Hence
,
this
 scenario will
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effect
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affect
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 economically both in the form of
decline
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 in livelihood and expensive
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purchasing
purcahsing
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purchasing
 of
conveyence
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conveyance
convenience
 items. Despite of disadvantages there are a few advantages
can
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 be seen in
this
 situation, like the cost will be high, but the person whoever unable to drive
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 will become
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independent
independant
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independent
for
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 their travelling. So, automatically controlling wheels will be advantageous for handicaps.
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disable
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 population of America has become self-
relient
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reliant
 by
this
 technology, as mentioned in an article.
However
, these additions in vehicles
primarily
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 convenient for special citizens. To conclude, I believe that the cons will be higher as compared to the pros. The more will be
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automation, the less will be
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labour.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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