You live near a recreation ground. A local school brings pupils to the recreation ground to do sports, such as football and cricket, but recently this caused some problems. Write to the head of the school. -explain why you enjoy living by the recreation ground -describe the recent problems -and say what you think the school should do.

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Dear school principal, I am writing

this

letter to express my dissatisfaction with the recent problem caused by the students from your school. I have lived here in the Wanhua district since 2004. The park is one of the cleanest and safest places in our neighbourhood, where I always like to go in the mornings and enjoy a touch of warm breeze. Unfortunately, I noticed that some of them littered the park and did not clean up the snack packages when they left. Especially after they have a football contest, a large amount of rubbish is found on the ground. I would appreciate it if you could put a sign at the entrance of the park and emphasize the regulations to the students during their classes.

Nevertheless

, I would definitely like to see them get close to nature together once they understand the importance of environmental protection. Yours sincerely, Kelly Hsu

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