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Many people believe that the age of shopping malls is coming to an end, soon online shopping will completely replace retail stores. Explain the reasons for this and give your own opinion.

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store shopping will be soon
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replaced
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online one. In my point of
view
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this
 will happen for sure since the advantages of
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online shopping
fits
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 better with
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 busy
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lifestyle
blifestyle
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lifestyle
.
In these
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 days we live our lives faster than ever before, we have all busy days so we need to save as much time as possible and
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online
services
 are the best way to accomplish that.
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online e-commerce
such
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 space where all brands are available within
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 clicks which is
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impossible
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impossible
 in a mall. Sometimes to check all our favourite retail
stores
 we need to change different malls or shopping roads which takes
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 huge
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amount
amoung
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Furthermore
, there is
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 wide range of
services
 we can't have in the
stores
, let's think about the security of the online payment, the shipping and returning
services
, the phone
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assistance
assistence
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assistance
also
 after the payment. All
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,
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 contributes to the user experience which is always individual and equal for all the clients while in the
stores
 there are just
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employees
employers
employeers
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employees
 for several clients. In
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addiction
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, online sites
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the
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review session where is possible to check
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others
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clients
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 reviews so we have more information about something we would like to buy.
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brand awareness and it helps to avoid bad experiences. Taking into consideration all the points above, I truly believe that
this
 is the end of the
stores
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 age and that in the following years a lot of live
services
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replaced
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repleaced
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online ones.
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