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Some experts believe that this is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweight the disadvantages?

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Adept at speaking, writing and listening skills in a
second
language
 give people a golden opportunity in many fields due to globalisation. It is believed that
children
 should be better to learn a foreign
language
 in elementary
school
 than in secondary
school
. In my opinion, the benefits of
this
 are by far the drawbacks. The essay will analyse how studying a foreign
language
 brings
children
 better chances in their foreseeable future as an advantage and how hard it would be for them to totally understand other countries' cultural context when learning a
language
 as a disadvantage before clarifying the conclusion. On the one hand, starting to learn a non-native
language
 at primary
school
 takes time for
children
 to understand the completely international cultural context.
For example
, my 6 years old sister, who just attended elementary
school
, have to study French as her
second
language
. Because the grammar, vocabulary and foreign culture are unfamiliar to her, she can not fully understand and use them right. It can be seen that
children
 may not have enough ability to learn complex non-native languages.
Although
 there are some languages which are hard for
children
 to study at an early age, parents can choose prevalent others for their sons and daughters due to their fast remembering and applying ability in learning a
language
.
Thus
, I think the disadvantage of
this
 is minor.
On the other hand
, letting
children
 to studying a
second
language
besides
 their mother tongue can provide them with a bright future.
For instance
, according to a survey conducted in China and Vietnam,
children
 who began learning English at primary
school
 would have a linguistic certification from a foreign organization,
such
 as Cambridge, and have a chance to enrol in high-ranked schools in their area.
This
 means that these
children
then
 have a concrete foundation to approach higher and better education, which gives them a key to a successful future. It is clear that
children
 enrolled in foreign
language
 courses at primary
school
 will receive their hard-won results after a long and hard-working process.
Therefore
, starting to learn a non-native
language
 when in elementary
school
 brings nothing but advantages in the long term for
children
. In conclusion, in spite of the difficulty in studying an unfamiliar
language
 at an early age, I strongly believe that
this
 provides more benefits than drawbacks.
Submitted by thaothanh1323 on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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