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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that high schools should incorporate unpaid
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service
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 in their educational programmes. I totally agree with the former view and will give my reasons below. On the one hand, an unpaid
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service
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 scheme plays an important role in educating
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 about their country.
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, the “Green Summer” is held at Viet Nam high schools every summer to encourage teenagers to volunteer themselves doing charity work for the local communities.
Students
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 are given several tasks to complete
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 as taking care of elderly people at local nursing homes or transporting goods and
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 supplies to remote areas. They,
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, have a better understanding of the lives of people in other places and the problems that the country is wrestling with.
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, unpaid
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such
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 as improving a residential area or giving a presentation about sports to juniors can bring about numerous benefits to high
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students
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.
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, these volunteer activities offer pupils a chance to have a temporary break from their studies. They have more time to relax and make friends as
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service
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 involves the engagement of different high schools.
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,
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 work like these may give them a sense of purpose since they feel needed and respected
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 becoming more confident in social situations.
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, some
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 might have discovered what they are interested in, which helps to choose their majors after graduation from high
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 In conclusion, I believe that the addition of unpaid
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service
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 in the high
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 curriculum can educate their
students
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 more effectively by giving them opportunities to acquire useful knowledge and relieve stress.
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