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Although nowadays people are reading news through internet, newspaper still remain of values. Do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, digitization has become an integral part of our
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, and it has an impact on every aspect of life, including our reading habits. Even though these days
people
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 are using the internet to read
news
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, some believe
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 still hold their place and values. In my opinion, digital source of
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 has superseded physical magazines. The primary reason for
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 paradigm shift is owing to the ease of availability of
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 digitally,
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 do not have to wait for the updates till the newspaper arrives.
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, in the olden days, individuals
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 to wait for physical
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 or wait to be cast on television, but in the current
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information
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 is spread in a matter of seconds through high-speed digital channels.
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, the
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 on the web can be organized efficiently and used at a later point.
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, the digital way of storing
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 articles saves the environment. To illustrate, physical paper is made by chopping a huge number of trees.
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, it causes severe damage to the environment.
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, with the availability of
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 a lot of physical space can be utilized for other purposes.
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,
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 can save money by reading
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 online.
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, it would cost around 90$ for a monthly subscription to physical
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,
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 reading doesn't isn't expensive.
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, more
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 are inclined towards online sources of
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. In conclusion, with the advancements in technology, I believe, digital
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 will be the primary source of
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 and physical
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 will
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • credibility
  • thorough journalism
  • ritual
  • historical documents
  • digital media
  • community-focused
  • accessibility
  • reading habits
  • media pluralism
  • in-depth analysis
  • news consumption
  • digital natives
  • media literacy
  • traditional media
  • print journalism
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