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One of the consequence of improved medical care is that people are living longer life and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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From Earlier days to the present day, there is a huge enhancement in medical research. Some
communities
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 believe that
people
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 are improving their
life
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 span through advanced medical care while some other
communities
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 argue with
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 matter. In
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 essay, I will discuss both advantages and
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 we will see whether the advantages overweigh the
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 or not. On the one side, Medical research is a part of globalization where there is rapid growth in
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 technology.
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, During Covid-19, medical research is done to cure the Carona Virus.
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, by improving the
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 expectancy of
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, elder
people
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 are living longer where these elder
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 are having high experience in their workforces and have lots of patience compared to younger pupils. With their experience and patience, these
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 will handle various problems in society.
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, In China, the average age of the population is 85, where elder
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 are more in count compared to younger. Due to
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 reason, the GDP of China is high compared to other countries.
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,
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 should take care of their offspring when they go into the workforce so it is better to leave their offspring with their grandparents rather than a caretaker. Infants who grow up near their grandparents have great improvements in their skills compared to children who are left with caretakers. On the other side, there are some
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 when there is an increase in
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 expectancy because by improving the
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 span of
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 the elder
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 population is more compared to youngsters. Due to
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 reason, in every workforce employees are almost elder
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 whereas younger
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 are getting fewer opportunities. And society should take care of their elder members and look after their medical problems.
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 may lead to a rapid decline in the economy of a country. To sum up, In my view the advantages overweigh the
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. By improving the
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 span of
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 younger
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 can learn things from elder
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 with their experience.
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