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In order to Spend a quality life, some say, people need to have more money and some say people need free time. What do you think is important. What are the other things which are required to have a quality life?

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Nowadays, part of individuals
say
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 that having more cash to lay out a
quality
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 of
life
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,
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other
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others
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 believe
citizen
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citizens
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 need leisure
time
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. I think both are significant
point
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points
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 to spend a better
life
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 in
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today's
today
todays
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 era and other objects are
also
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 required.
This
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analysed
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objectives
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the objectives
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 of money and
time
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as well as other
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, as well as other thinks,
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things
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thinks
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things
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need
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 to have a
quality
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 of
life
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 with a reasonable conclusion. To commence with that the funds are vital to
fulfil
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 the needs. To explain it more, in
the
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modern
time
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 every contemporary thing
included
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is included
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 in
good
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a good
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 level of
life
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 and those products
purchased
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are purchased
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 with cash, so they have more money to
complet
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complete
 the
requiremnets
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requirements
 of
a
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quality
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 of
life
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.
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, free
time
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essential
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is essential
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 to use those things which make a
quality
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 of
life
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 and if they
does
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do
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 not enjoy that
life
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 for which they earn capital
then
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that is
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 not a standard of
life
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.
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, In
european
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European
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 countries humankind work
in
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 the weekdays and on the
weekend
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,weekend
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 they enjoy those days by spending
time
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 outside, like visiting
to
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the beaches.
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, The family is
one
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another
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factor
factors
factory
factore
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factor
 in order to spend a good
life
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. To spell it out more, they have money and
time
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, but if they
not
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do not
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having
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have
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family
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a family
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 with whom they utilised
there
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their
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time
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 and enjoy
thier
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their
life
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.
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, a person
find
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 happiness in
quality
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 of
life
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 and
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 only become when they have relations. So human
being
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beings
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 need a family to lay out a class of
life
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. In conclusion, currency and
time
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major
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are major
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point
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points
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 of the
quality
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 of
life
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 and by joining these two a standard of
life
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occurs
occur
occure
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occurs
. Whereas family is
other
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another
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 key point of
life
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, so it
also
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 compulsory,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial resources
  • Life satisfaction
  • Mental health
  • Free time
  • Work-life balance
  • Excessive
  • Imbalances
  • Quality of life
  • Healthcare
  • Recreational activities
  • Social connections
  • Community bonds
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Sense of purpose
  • Financial stability
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