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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a controversy about whether life would be better if
technology
 was simpler. I disagree with
this
 argument, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
,
technology
 brings convenience to our life. Take me as an example. I moved to a new city one week ago;
this
 is the
first
 time I have been to
this
 city.
Therefore
, I have been using google Maps these days
so as
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to find my destinations.
On the contrary
, if GPS wasn'
t
 invented; it could be difficult for
people
 to live in places they don'
t
 know.
Besides
, thanks to the existence of GPS, which promotes our working efficiency, and avoids wasting time.
For example
, with GPS, the government can better manage its
people
.
Second
,
technology
 lessens famine largely. It's expected that there were machines in the past;
hence
, farmers had to grow crops themselves.
Nevertheless
, as a consequence of self-planting, food production wasn'
t
 enough to feed all
people
 around the country;
thus
, there were frequent famines that took place.
On the other hand
, with machines, food production can be increased substantially, and they can even grow some exotic products as well,
such
 as chilli pepper.
Third
, ascending our living standards. It's commonplace that due to the existence of fridges, we can drink cold drinks and eat ice creams freely.
However
, ancient
people
 didn'
t
 have
this
 condition, they could only consume what they had in their hands. It can be said that
technology
 promotes our living standards considerably. In conclusion, I believe life would be better with
technology
.
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