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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a controversy about whether life would be better if
technology
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 was simpler. I disagree with
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 argument, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
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,
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 brings convenience to our life. Take me as an example. I moved to a new city one week ago;
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 is the
first
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 time I have been to
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 city.
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, I have been using google Maps these days
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to find my destinations.
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, if GPS wasn'
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 invented; it could be difficult for
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 to live in places they don'
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 know.
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, thanks to the existence of GPS, which promotes our working efficiency, and avoids wasting time.
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, with GPS, the government can better manage its
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.
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,
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 lessens famine largely. It's expected that there were machines in the past;
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, farmers had to grow crops themselves.
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, as a consequence of self-planting, food production wasn'
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 enough to feed all
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 around the country;
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, there were frequent famines that took place.
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, with machines, food production can be increased substantially, and they can even grow some exotic products as well,
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 as chilli pepper.
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, ascending our living standards. It's commonplace that due to the existence of fridges, we can drink cold drinks and eat ice creams freely.
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, ancient
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 didn'
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 have
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 condition, they could only consume what they had in their hands. It can be said that
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 promotes our living standards considerably. In conclusion, I believe life would be better with
technology
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.
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