Some People Think That The Problem With Education In Poor Countries Is The Teaching Methodology Used

In the present era, the governments are more
focusing
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on
education
as a result
of
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awareness
awarness
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awareness
in the
people
.
However
, some
third world
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countries
cannot contribute their best in schooling. I believe that developing
countries
are still facing some economical and financial issues to encourage studies. I have mentioned several problems
further
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essay.
Firstly
, in poor
countries
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basic necessities
such
as food,
habitate
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habitat
habitats
and health are not completely
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fulfilling
fullfilling
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fulfilling
.
Majority
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of
public
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the public
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are living below
poverty
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the poverty
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line. Where
country's
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population is already suffering from scarcity of primary needs, the government cannot fund
on
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education
.
Hence
, in public
schools
methods of
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teaching
teching
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teaching
is extremely poor. The government hires less
knowledgable
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teachers in low income who could not take proper lessons.
Additionally
,
lack
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of land for
school's
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playground
,
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hinders
students
to participate in sports and various functions. Many public
schools
are not offering proper and nutritive mid-day meals to children, which
also
lessens
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encouragement
encouragment
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encouragement
among
students
.
Furthermore
, in developing
countries
,
mentality
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the mentality
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of poor
people
is
also
very poor and negative. They think that schooling is
waste
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a waste
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of money and time.
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Children
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Child
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A child
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can learn and earn better when they are exposed to labour or farming work.
This
is the reason why child labourism is prevalent in poor nations.
Moreover
, gender discrimination is
the
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another great
obstacles
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obstacle
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towards
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education
. Many teachers in
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government
goverment
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government
schools
sometimes give their personal
works
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work
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to
students
instead
of taking lectures. On top of
this
,
schools
don't have a regular
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blackboard
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black board
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as well as fans and
tubelights
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tube lights
in the classrooms. While
,
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some rich public who can afford private
schools
send their children there and are ready to invest money
over
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in
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education
.
However
,
majority
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the majority
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of
people
are of
backward
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the backward
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class,
overall
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literacy rate is lower in developing
countries
as compared to
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developed
develpoed
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developed
nations.
On the other hand
, in rich
countries
where
students
are provided audio-visual rooms, tablets and laptops for studies, can remain more attentive
towards
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education
. They can understand topics better by doing practicals and seeing picturization and tutorial videos on it. Regular test patterns and memorizing tools, help
students
to recall and apply
studies
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content easily. In conclusion, major government money is used on
people
's primary needs in
the
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third world
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countries
, leaders cannot spend more on
education
and schooling.
Hence
,
poor
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the poor
a poor
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methodology is
the
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a
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problem in
education
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the education
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system.
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