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people think that marriage should happen only when couples are financially secure. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #marriage #couples
According to
people
,
couples
 who reach a definite financial sufficiency should decide to get married. I partially agree with
this
 statement. So,
this
 essay will express my opinions regarding both sides. On the one hand,
people
 should have financial stability in order to get basic life necessities.
This
 is necessary even for a person who lives alone or lives with their family while marriage in the capitalist era means that all living costs,
such
 as bills or food, will double as
couples
 live together.
In addition
, if
people
 do not have a house which is suitable to live for a new couple, they will whether decide to buy a new one or not.
This
 will require either capital or credibility which is given by banks.
Therefore
, financial proficiency that provides a standard life for
couples
 is important.
On the other hand
, many
people
 want to live with someone compatible as soon as possible and they think that financial issues can deal with in heading time. For
this
 reason, some alternative income sources are being looked for by
couples
 following their wedding. Especially, rising technology integrated social media into our lives and some different occupation opportunities appear in meantime,
such
 as being influencers.
Couples
 can prefer to do jobs like it
in addition
 to their steady job in order to gain economic relief. To summarize, in many ways, being married is an issue which is important and needs to be thought about deeply.
Couples
 who do not have financial proficiency may have to find passive income for a healthy marriage.
Submitted by Oğuzhan Balcı on

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