In some countries increasing number of people are suffering from from health problems result of eating too much fast foods government should impose higher taxes on them on what extent do you agree or disagree with this

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is the trending problem nowadays, people are suffering

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many fitness related

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because

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because

of eating outside

meal

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a burger

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burger

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sandwich

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, pizza, etc. I disagree

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statement

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given that government should apply taxes on fast foods.

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party should not deal with these

type

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of problems because they have got many other important

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to handle,

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are many issues to solve after them like defence, infrastructure,

other

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and other

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development projects,

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of looking or solving these issues

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don't think they should be focusing on the fast foods or taxes on it. for

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there are many

croud

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crowd

that are earning

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of the food stalls or meal restaurants. they will be affected because of it.

on the other

hand

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talking about the health concern of the people, they should be

self aware

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this

thing government can not focus on these type of task.it is ok to eat outsider meat one's or twice in

month

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but eating it for daily will affect there own

helath

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health

, and

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applying taxes on street stalls or maida product will not stop eater from having it, so

this

will not help

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the

cosumption

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consumption

or health issue

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it. To summarize, bakery product which contains maida in it are not good for

human

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body, por respect to

there

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health issue.

government

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the government

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should

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not give attention

towards

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these issues because they have other things to handle.

also

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would like to suggest people

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apply

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have house food , to stay

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healthy

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heathy

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