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The world today is faced with global warming which is becoming more serious day by day. Why do you think is has happened? What are effects of this development?

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The bar chart illustrates the information about the percentage of four transportation modes in a European city which used to travel between workplace and residence in three different years with the twenty years interval, starting from 1960. Overall, it can be seen from the graph that
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transport by car was the greatest number in the year 2000, while the majority of people prefer to transport on foot in 1960.
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 an upward trend, travelling by car rose dramatically from approximately 7% to about 25% in 1980, and moderately grew to 37% in 2000. Moving on the downward trend, the most remarkable point
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 the proportion of foot mode was noticeably decreased by nearly a quarter, falling from 35 in 1960 to 10 in 2000.
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bike
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 presented a similar trend to considerably drop by around a fifth. The exception to
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 point,
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1980.
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