Some people believe teenagers should concentrate on all subjects, even ones they do not enjoy.  Others, however, believe that teenagers should only focus on the subjects they are bast at or find most interesting. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In mostly all schools, some
subjects
are compulsory for
teenagers
until they reach a specific grade. Some
persons
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believe that even though
teenagers
dislike some
subjects
, they should concentrate anyway on them. On the
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other hand
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other hand
, some
people
believe that
teenagers
should focus only on the
subjects
that they find the most interesting. I believe that both opinions have their importance which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs. I personally think that all
subjects
set by the secondary schools should be taught to all
teenagers
irrespective they like or dislike the
subjects
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because they should get the basic lessons of Science, Art, English, Maths,etc, which are important and allows them to get the basic academical knowledge.
Then
, when the
teenagers
reach a specific age and grade, they should get the choice to select the special field they want to study either technical side or science
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. Some parents have the tendency to choose the fields of
subjects
of
teenagers
and in
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it leads to
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complete disinterest and disgust from these young students. Facts have proved
also
that when young
people
are not given the opportunity to choose
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subjects
they like, they quit
school
earlier and sometimes become delinquents. Admittedly, one drawback for young
people
to choose their
subjects
is that they think they have the right to do what they want at
school
. Whereas, if
rules
and regulations are set
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them, they know that they have to follow the
rules
of their
school
and inquisitively, they will inculcate discipline and obedience. I remember in my
school
, I had to comply
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the
school
rules
as a teenager and I was obliged to complete all the
subjects
which were on my syllabus. It is true that I did not like all the
subjects
but having a variety of
subjects
I knew which one I wanted to study later on but
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developed a great sense of discipline in me.
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, I strongly believe that some
subjects
should be compulsory
to
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all
teenagers
as
this
sets
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and
rules
to
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these young
people
and they should abide
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it
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. At a later stage, they should have the right to choose the subject of their choice.
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