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Some people think the government should spend more money on sport facilities for top athletes. Other people think the government should spend more money on sport facilities for everybody. Discuss both views

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Most
people
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 nowadays believe that authorities ought to invest more money in improving
athlewes'
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athletes
 access to sporting
facilities
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, while others disagree with
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 idea and think that
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 money should be used to build public
sports
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facilities
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. In the following paragraphs, both of these views will be discussed in detail before a
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conclusion
conclosion
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conclusion
 is reached. On the one hand, there is the ministry that provides
sports
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facilities
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 to assist athletes,
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 as an excellent coach who determines the training schedule, a stadium for training, including
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accommodation
accomodation
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accommodation
 and nutrition for diet.
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 can help them become better athletes.
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 sportsmen will have the potential to fight with
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competition
compettion
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competition
.
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, when it is time for the Olympics game, they will improve their skills and become a winner in that game.
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 the reputation of their countries.
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, if the
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state
stae
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state
 prepares
budget
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a budget
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 to construct a public
sports
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 facility, it will help
population
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the population
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 have
place
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a place
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 to go to
exercise
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,
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 as a park for running and a gym for workouts.
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,
people
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 who
spendtime
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spend time
spent time
 working out in their spare time will achieve better health and be in good shape.
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, the incidence of obesity will go down as well as the number of
population
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the population
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 who have office syndrome will improve. In some cases,
people
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 will live longer with their parents. In conclusion, it is true to say that the
sports
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facilities
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 provided by the government are much more
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beneficial
benefitcial
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beneficial
 for athletes and ordinary
people
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. Both of them deserve it.
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