You wish to get enrolled in a course at an Australian college. You have already written a letter to the college asking for information, but you haven’t received a reply yet. Write a letter to the college explaining your concern because the course will start in less than two months. You need to know if you can still get enrolled, you also request more information about the course, including the cost.

Dear Kate, I am writing to lodge a concern about my email, which I
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sent on 23 January and have not received an answer yet. The email was about the details I am interested in about the course of Applied Mathematics at an Australian college, which would take place in less than two months. I wonder if it is still possible to get enrolled in the program with an estimated starting date
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15 March. I am eager to learn some practical skills as I have recently obtained a Bachelor's degree in Mathematics.
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, studying
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course would be a great advantage for my future career. As I am very interested in your institution's programme, I would be grateful if you could inform me about the syllabus, so I could prepare in advance to facilitate a swift onboarding process.
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, I would appreciate it if you could send me the details about the cost of the course and all the additional fees that are not included in the main price. Thank you for your assistance in
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matter. I look forward to your response at
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earliest convenience. Best regards, Julia.

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task response
State the start date and enrollment ask in one clear line.
coherence
Put each big idea in its own paragraph to help flow.
tone/grammar
Keep a formal tone and fix small errors, like 'your earliest convenience' and the name format.
content
Ask for the price and fees in a simple way so the reader can clearly see numbers.
format
Finish with a kind sign-off and give your contact info if you have it.
content
The letter asks for key info on enrollment and cost.
tone
It uses a polite and respectful tone.
format
Greeting and closing are clear and proper.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enrollment
  • Course details
  • Urgency
  • Syllabus
  • Duration
  • Class schedule
  • Tuition fees
  • Materials
  • Documentation
  • Deadline
  • Assistance
  • Prompt response
  • Candidacy
  • Clarification
  • Concern
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