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Some parents are worried about increasing levels of violence in TV,Video games and other entertainments for Children's leisure. how does this affects the children? how do you think this can be tackled?

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time's
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children's
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childrens
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 feet by dangerous
games
 and
videos
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wich
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 are increasing their rudeness.they are worrying about their effects on
behaviour
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 and emotions of their
children
.I agree with
this
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children
's
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. To start with,the effects of anomalous
games
 are on different aspects of
children
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for example
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games
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time
,
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.
also
,sometimes speaking
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play
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playing
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games
 or see
videos
being
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habit
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,the
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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 aren't able to do their
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homework
homeworks
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homework
 and it has
a terrible effects
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a terrible effect
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 on their education.
Peoples
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People
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 who have
children
 should
be control
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 the
games
 and
videos
 which are provided to their
children
.of
course
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 a plan for their
children
's free
time
 and limits the free
time
 of the
children
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games
 and see
videos
.residue times can feat by learning something else wich daughters or boys like them. In conclusion,the
increasing
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of
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violence
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the violence
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of
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games
 and movies
are
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 harmful
for
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emotions
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the emotions
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 of
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children
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childrens
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children
 .people should control their
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children's
children
childrens
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 plays and movies.they can replace
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it
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good hoboes or useful classes for learning some art.
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