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*Because so much information is available on the internet today, traditional secondary schools and teachers are no longer necessary. Do you agree with this statement?*

Currently, because there are a lot of data accessible on the
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, a section of society opines that higher schools and educators are no more significant .I totally oppose
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 view because of technical problems and occupation.The essay will explain in detail the reasons for my stance as well as examples in the subsequent paragraphs.
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 with,the most compelling reason for agreeing with
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 view is a career.To become a nurse or a doctor, a teacher has to teach them to become who they are.For ,example nobody has become a health worker by studying online.
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 there is vast information on the
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, teachers are a good source of information.They make sure to select relevant topics which will aid students to pass their exams.
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,educators are well adept with skills to teach for students to understand.
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 ,with the
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 it is difficult to understand some topics.
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,another reason for concording with
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 opinion that tutors are significant is technical problems.Some parts of society do not have electricity so using the
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 will be a problem.
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,in my ,village there is no
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 access so students resort to teachers.
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 is where tutors become important here.
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,not everyone is well adept with the computer so they will tend to teachers for tuition .If there is a network problem they can not learn.
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 ,educators are very essential even though there are a lot of data online. In conclusion,the essay argued that tutors are very vital though there is a variety of information on the
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. Technical issues and career are the reasons I concord with
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 opinion.

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