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It becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#year #school #university
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Most of the students yearly decided to have
a
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year
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 after graduation from
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high school
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highschool
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.
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, if you do not have a good
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 that
year
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, you will lose your
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 in the wrong way which some people use
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to earn money with
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part-time
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part
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part-time
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time
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 jobs and do
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 about their future.
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year
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a year
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 off after
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highschool
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 has some
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 if you did not have a
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 for it.
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, you will lose one of your useful
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year
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which
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 you can learn lots of new things but you just spend it with nothing.
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, when you are far from
education
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the education
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 system, your fellow classmates will
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 you by learning new skills in university and college.
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, you decide to stay home
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 your friends are going to
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university and earn knowledge but you are at home and your knowledge will not improve.
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, do not have a
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 and spending
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 in the wrong way are the major drawbacks of
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year
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 off. On the other, you can use that
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 to learn many new skills and complete your research about your interests and what you want to study.
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, that
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 can be a really good
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 to apply for a
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part
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time
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 job
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 you can save money and earn experience.
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, after finishing
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highschool
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 you still do not know in what field you can be
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successful or what is your interest, so
on
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 that
year
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 you can complete your
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 about different types of careers and universities, in the meantime, you can work which the money you will earn can be helpful for your future.
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,
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year
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 of can
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 in
such
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 positive ways if you create a luminary
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 for it. To conclude,
drawbacks
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 of
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year
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a year
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 off can be abysmal for you if just spending your
time
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 and doing nothing when your classmates all improving their knowledge, while having a
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 and
know
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 by yourself what you want to do
on
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 that
year
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 can help you to
chose
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 your future way better and get ready for it with working and earning experience.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
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  • financial burden
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