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Some schools require their students to wear uniforms because they believe it helps the students focus on their schoolwork rather than on their clothes. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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Schools in many different areas believe that wearing
uniforms
 to
school
 is a helpful way to better concentrate in
school
.
Thus
, they request students to wear them
everyday
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 helping them shift their attention onto more important topics.
Although
uniforms
 have their positives, allowing
people
 to save time and study more, I believe that overall, not wearing them can be more beneficial for the students.
This
 essay will discuss beneficial points to
uniforms
 as well as topics that support my idea.
Firstly
,
to
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 some schools, wearing
uniforms
 to class can be beneficial, it allows students to concentrate on their schoolwork during academy hours because they are never fixated on what other
people
 might think of them and well as saving time in the mornings, clearing their heads of yet another stressful event, leaving their brain fresh for learning experiences, resulting in a less dramatic and calmer space, where they can show their potential through their activities.
In addition
, the uniform policy
also
 enhances the
schools
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 name and community, giving the
school
 a respectful image.
Nevertheless
, as positive as
uniformes
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uniforms
 can be in the learning environment, children are not fully able to express themselves. Some might argue that to keep
people
 motivated and attentive
towards
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 schoolwork, it is important that they feel unique and able to show who they are.
Although
school
 is a place to learn and become aware of new things, it is
also
 a place to make friends and show individuality. From my point of view, wearing clothes that make
people
 feel most like themselves is what allows them to concentrate and become more efficient in their tasks. There is no better way to get things done than when you are fully and inexplicably yourself. In conclusion, even though there are advantages to attending class in
school
 attire, to both the individuals and the
school
 itself, the expression of oneself through their clothing style is what I believe allows
people
 to become productive in their work and life.
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