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Influence of human beings on the worlds ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. Causes and solutions

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Nowadays , numerous species are being lost by environmental problems and
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 many more will become extinct so
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 essay illustrates the reason and solution for the above statement.
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 of all , people are hunting animals due to get their expensive things like leathers , nails and teeth ,
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 , they do not think that one day it will cease to exist,
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, a number of wildlife species , we can see only in the zoo ,
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 , it disturbs the process of the environment.
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 , a plethora of people's mistakes, the situation like wildfire is created in the forest ,
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 , it harmful all over the wildfire , who lives in the forest ,
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 as
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 year , it was created by humans in the African forest and it was started by just one piece of cigarette ,
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 , which hunted thousands of animals and some of them were very rare to see.
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 , the government should work on it and the area where animals live should be restricted to the public ,
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 , currently , a number of areas are there , which is not allowed to go people ,
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 , wildlife lives peacefully without us.
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 , whenever wildfires start at that time fire workers come immediately to solve
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 problem ,
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 , many countries have a good fire system to stop and
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 , they can easily stop and save them. In conclusion , it is not only the government's responsibility they are
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 our part of life to save them and take care of the environment and everyone must not disturb their life.
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