People are surrounded by advertising. This both affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays with the development of digital technology,

everyone

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can easily access any type of printed information or online data. Via the spread of news on digital

platforms

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everyone

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are

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in the maze of

commercials

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has an influence

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those who believe it is crucial by the unpositive way to their life. From my point of view, I partly disagree that advertisements will always affect people’s lives in a negative way.

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with, Not only at the present but some advertising forms

also

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appeared a few decades ago with eye-catching and magnificent forms. With the existence of

commercials

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everyone

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can know many new things about local or worldwide and broaden their horizons via multitude

forms

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of forms

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of marketing.

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, if

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the advertisement

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does not exist, it will be difficult for

everyone

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to be informed about

somethings

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some things

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which just appear on market.

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, Burji Khalifa, the highest building in the world

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is located in the United Arab Emirates, thanks

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modern technology

everyone

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around the world can know about it.

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, advertisements should be limited or some unexpected corollary cannot be prevented and fixed. Meanwhile, at the present time

commercials

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are being abused and spread a lot both in real life and online, these all create discomfort and disturb

everyone

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. All the routes in VietNam all have

ads

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with big size to small size, more or

less

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words,it will force

everyone

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on that road to have to look and focus on it even in any corners.

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, more and more junk and deceptive

ads

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appear on the Internet even

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some well-known applications

such

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as Youtube, Facebook and Twitter. These nonsense

commercials

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just keep reappearing many times but the managers of those applications do not interfere and solve trash

ads

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for users.

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, with the increasing number of children using the Internet, kids may understand the message of the advertisement in a negative way and facsimile to the commercial videos,

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may cause hazardous accidents to children when copying the videos.

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, watching too

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many

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shopping

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will make children have

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materialism and shopping habits, if these habits are maintained until they grow up, they will

wasting

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waste

be wasting

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money on buying clothes and

stuffs

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stuff

kinds of stuff

pieces of stuff

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and do not know how to save money, and if they see comparison

ads

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, they will have a comparison theory and they will be shy when

compare

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themselves to others.

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, parents should

children’s

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phone time to keep them away from harmful advertisements. In conclusion, display advertising through digital platforms or on the wall

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basic and effective ways to introduce new products to

everyone

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who can understand the function and try it. My take on

this

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is the

ads

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need to limit to

everyone

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do not

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panic when there are a lot of

commercials

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surrounding them. It will be an extraordinary and gorgeous world without trash and squalid

ads

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

476 words

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