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Essay topics: Students in school and university learn far more by lessons with their teachers compared to other sources(example: television and internet). Do you agree or disagree?

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With the growth in the internet and
technology
 trends, many
students
 can benefit from
this
 opportunity in their academic journey. I believe nowadays
students
 can benefit more from modern open
technology
 rather than from only lessons taught by teachers and I will discuss
this
 assertion in length.
To begin
 with, it is a really tough task to teach and make
students
 understand a particular topic.
Moreover
, many
students
 prefer one-to-one teaching sessions rather than attending lectures and individual teaching is only possible with digitalization in
technology
.
For instance
, in a survey report conducted during the COVID-19 pandemic,
students
 attending online classes were asked to choose teaching methodologies from old or new research-based studies. Surprisingly, the majority of
students
 preferred a research-oriented teaching style rather than only being dependent on the teacher's ideology.
Secondly
, learning is an unending process we cannot justify or measure our learning. We and our
technology
 are evolving very fast and
knowledge
 grabbed yesterday may even be irreverent.
Moreover
, it is very hard for teachers to be updated on daily new things and update their
students
.
Furthermore
, learning on the Internet is open source and is almost free any student can grab the latest updated
knowledge
 and make themselves stand out for better career opportunities. To conclude, an initial learning teacher path is needed but for individual brilliance,
students
 must invest themselves as learning and grabbing new
knowledge
 is an unending process for any student, utilization of the internet for teaching and sharing new
knowledge
 must not be implemented and brought into practice.
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