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in city people want to live alone. what are the reason what do you thing is negative or positive in this

In recent years, the number of people choosing to live alone is steadily increasing, especially in urban areas.
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 essay will discuss the reasons behind
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 trend and argue that,
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 living alone offers certain advantages, its drawbacks outweigh the benefits. On
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 hand, living alone allows people to become more independent. In urban areas, people believe that staying alone makes them strong and helps them learn to manage their lives without relying on others.
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, many full-time corporate employees prefer to stay alone, because they get too tired to interact with others after work.
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, living alone can help individuals build confidence and a sense of responsibility, which are valuable skills in personal and professional life.
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, there are several drawbacks of living alone, one of which is the risk of becoming financially vulnerable. In cities, renting an apartment or even a small room is significantly more expensive than sharing accommodation with others. A recent survey shows that an individual spends 60-70 % of their monthly income on
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 and bills, which leaves them with a smaller portion of income to manage all other expenses.
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, staying alone makes them homesick and stressed as they have no one with whom to share their thoughts or feelings.
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, living alone can make an individual weak
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 emotionally and psychologically vulnerable.
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, it can be concluded that the limitations related to living alone offset the merits associated with
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 as it often leads to both financial strain and emotional isolation.

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task response
Plan opening and main points in a short plan at the start.
supporting points
Give more clear examples to back each idea so the reader can see real life link.
coherence
Use clear links like also, but, so to show how ideas go.
structure
End with a short summary of your view and the main ideas.
lexical resource
Use easy words and short sentences; avoid hard words.
task response
The view is clear and the use of contrast is good.
structure
Intro and conclusion are in place.
coherence
Linking phrases like On one hand/On the other hand help the flow.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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