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In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree

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Many of today's trends showcase their talent thru social media platforms. Some populations surmise that having
such
 an attitude of 'anyone can do it in the arts either music, literature, acting, art, etc. In effect, a population with no certain abilities with regard to
this
 stuff become rich and famous and somehow those who have real talent are not valued and appreciated. I totally agree on
this
 matter,
This
 essay will discuss my stance in the subsequent paragraphs. One of the reasons for
this
 phenomenon is that every individual has the right to showcase whatever
talents
 they have on social media which is Facebook,Instagram, and Tiktok, which is the famous sector to showcase one's abilities. To illustrates, citizens
such
 as social media influencers have the ability to get attention from society without doing anything, simply by showing stuff in their day-to-day life or even just by simply posting things that do not matter.
In addition
, some
also
 think that even we have the entitlement to perform dancing even if we are not capable as long as it is on trend they will immediately gain a lot of viewers,
therefore
 they become famous and rich.
Furthermore
, viewer appreciates more the things that will make them happy. So if a person they follow is somehow kind and genuine excluding the
talents
, a lot of
people
 admire them and as a ,result a lot of
people
 will definitely be liked and talked about them making them famous and rich.
In contrast
 to these individuals who have
talents
, they are not valued and appreciated because it is not on the trend of what they do or the preferences of
people
 are different from what they have. To summarize,
people
 who are capable of doing things even without the needed
talents
 can be known by many and be able to get rich easier as nowadays the trend of appreciating individuals is not on talent but the popularity to many.
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