You have been offered a place at a university and wish to find suitable accommodation. Write a letter to the accommodation officer including the following information: the type of accommodation you wish to find some details about yourself any special requirements you may have and any other relevant information.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am delighted to have received a letter of acceptance for the M.Sc. in Computer Science program at your university. My name is Pramod, and I am writing to seek assistance in finding suitable accommodation.
While
I understand that the university offers both on-campus and off-campus student housing, I would prefer to live in off-campus housing. Ideally, I would like to share a house with 2-3 other students, where each of us would have a private room.
Although
it is not necessary for my housemates to be from the same field of study, I would appreciate sharing with individuals who are friendly and maintain a clean environment.
Although
I intend to spend most of my time studying in my room, it would be beneficial if my housemates
also
enjoy sports as a recreational activity.
This
would allow me the opportunity to take a break from
studies
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my studies
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occasionally. I would prefer accommodation close to the university, as I would like to avoid long travel times.
Therefore
, I am willing to pay a slightly higher rent for a convenient location. Please feel free to contact me at 98XXXXXX should you require any
further
details. Thank you for your assistance. Yours faithfully, Pramod
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Provide more details about special requirements if any, to enhance task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Consider breaking the letter into more distinct paragraphs for each point to improve coherence.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing phrases are excellently structured.
task achievement
The tone of the writing is highly suitable for a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a particular aspect of the accommodation request.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
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  • however
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  • despite

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