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Space exploration prices taxpayers an exorbitant amount of money every year. This essay discusses the advantage and disadvantages of spending money on explorations.

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, there are many advantages of spending
money
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 on
space
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explorations
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such
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 ass, individual cultures will develop and
science
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 will develop. The
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 pros are persons have a chance to see
space
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. Observing
space
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 is an incredible experience for a community. An extensive survey conducted by CNN revealed that spending
money
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 on different activities about
space
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 is absolutely
worth
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. It would increase people's Cultures. The
second
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 pros are a big development
on
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science
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 due to spending
money
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 on
space
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 exploration.
Science
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one
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 of the huge sections,
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 people must improve it . A study carried out by NASA showed that
spents
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spent
spends
money
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 on
space
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 events will 60% of increase the speed of
science
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 projects. İt will increase countries' economies.
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, there are many cons of expenditure
money
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 on
space
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explorations
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such
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 ass
explorations
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 are not a necessity and it is too expensive. The drawback is
space
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 discoveries are not
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 obligation. people do not have to do that. Research conducted recently indicated that individuals should not expenditure
money
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 on
space
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 because it is not a priority. İf they spend too much
money
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 on unnecessary things
money
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 will
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wastes
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.The
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 drawback of spending
money
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 on expenditure is it is pricey. The price is so significant for individuals. A study carried out by KOC University showed that if the government spends
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 on
space
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 government's
money
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 will suddenly decrease. After that country's economy impacts badly. İn conclusion,
space
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explorations
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 are so expensive. There are many pros and cons of spending
money
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 on
space
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 exploration. Professors suggested that Government should not spend a lot of
money
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 on
space
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explorations
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.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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