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Children should not be forced to develop good penmanship since computers and other mobile devices have done away with the need for having good handwriting. What are your views on the subject?

#children #penmanship #computers #devices
Education always provides better guidance to students. As
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 technology is advanced day by day across the globe. Many people believe handwriting does not matter and not forced little ones to improve their writing skills because in gadgets typing is
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 best feature. In my opinion, somehow it is true that digital platform is
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 part of life and changed many things as compared to
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To begin
 with, in
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 century when
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 of electronic devices
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 very few
then
 every company prefer to
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 a person with good handwriting because that time written letters to be sent for business.
Moreover
, when little one joins
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, after 1st class they have given
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 for handwriting to improve
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 writing skills.
For example
, in
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 banking
system
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 tasks can be done manually even passbooks can be given in
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 way only.
However
, now every work done on computers
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 life easier.
Hence
,
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 was essential when technology was not advanced.
On the other hand
, digital media assist to help in typing with the typewriter.
Furthermore
, within 30 minutes 10 pages can be easily
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written without any
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 in MS-word.
I
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, all data is available in search
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single
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 click like Google, chrome etcetera.
For instance
, some students are not able to remember the spelling so it is all available in search
engine
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. To conclude, generation has changed from time to time, new devices provide more facilities and
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 approachable in our daily life.
Therefore
, computers can perform any task
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 high speed which is not possible for humans.
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