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Writing Samples
Band 6

You recently visited a friend in their new house and noticed that a few items were not functioning properly. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Thank them for hosting you. Mention the items that were not working properly. Suggest what they could do to fix these issues.

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Dear Sam, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter to share some exciting things that I enjoyed during my recent visit
at
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to
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 your new home.
Additionally
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, I would like to give some suggestions regarding
few
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a few
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 items of your
hous
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house
 that were not working perfectly.
Firstly
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, I am glad that you
did
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made
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 lots of arrangements for my visit, and the meal was
mouth watering
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mouth-watering
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.
Moreover
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, I enjoyed
movie
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the movie
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, dance and all
quality
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the quality
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 time that I spent with you at your cost residence.
Secondly
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, I would like to discuss with you
about
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apply
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some items
such
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 as
garage
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the garage
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 gate and heater that were not functioning properly. When I tried to shut down the garage gate, it was
stucked
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stuck
 in the middle. As you know, car theft cases are increasing day by day, so safety should be at first priority.
Furthermore
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, I felt cold around 2 pm
in
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at
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 night
then
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 I noticed there was some issue with
heater
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the heater
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.
This
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 is not possible to stay inside the home without heating during
winter
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the winter
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 season.
Lastly
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, you should call your nearest mechanic to immediately fix the garage gate .
Next,
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there will be
customer
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a customer
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 service number on the bill of your heater, call them, and request them to fix the problem. I hope these suggestions will work for you. Have a great time ahead and thank you. Best wishes, Priyanka.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider breaking down the paragraphs to focus on a single issue per paragraph for better clarity.
Task Achievement
Ensure all parts of the task are addressed with equal depth for a more complete response.
Task Achievement
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, appropriate for writing to a friend.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure of the letter is clear, with a good progression of ideas from gratitude to suggestions.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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