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People produce more garbage than in the past. Explain how it is affecting us and the measures that could be taken to address the situation. Provide specific examples and explanation to support your answer.

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The recent generations and technologies contributed to the
problem
 of pollution due to massive garbages that has been produced. It provided us
a
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chaotic environment. Before, when the population is not that congested we can tell that
less
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fewer problems
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problem
such
 as
flood
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floods
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 can seldomly
noticed
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. If you happened to observe usually in
a crowded places
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crowded places
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 wherein less fortunate
resident
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residents
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 of
low income
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 families stayed. During those years, people
tends
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 to take
time
 to
dispose
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 their
garbage
. Recently, due to the increased
number of
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population, people are so busy that they
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do
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don
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 not have quality
time
 to sit and eat. On their way to school and work while chasing the
time
 to catch up the public utility vehicle or riding their comfortable transportation they will put something to their mouth.
Time
 is really gold
thus
 they
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don
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 not have the proper way to
dispose
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 their own
garbage
. Nowadays, with the improper disposal of
garbage
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,garbage
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 we can see that several places and countries experiencing heavy floods have several of their houses been affected that some of them need to evacuate living what they have put up. To minimise the
problem
 due to the increased number of
garbage
produce
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produced
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 every year the government should
imposed
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 the proper segregation of garbages. There should be
penalty
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a penalty
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 for throwing
litters
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litter
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 anywhere just like in Singapore. In the United Kingdom, the government provided a
colour coded
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garbage
 bin to every
households
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. Garbages can affect the health of every citizen if not
been
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collected or
been
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disposed
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 improperly. Aside from that,
this
 can
also
 attributes to the
problem
 of pollution.
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