Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

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Some people think
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should teach
children
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how to be good members of society others think
school
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is the place to learn, in
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essay I will give my own opinion. In my view from birth to the age of 7 , that age
children
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go to
school
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parents
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should teach them how they behave or what should they do, because
parents
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are the first people that
children
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meet and grow up with them, family and home is the first place that
children
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are a member of, so they learn in the family how they communicate, how
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for something that they want and how they face a problem. After the age of 7 when
children
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go to
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, they become members of the
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, and they meet . other people started to make new friends and at
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time
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a place where they should learn
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how they should even face their problems in
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to work as a team with other
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, in
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situation, begin to learn teamwork.
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both
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and
school
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at the same time teach
children
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how they should do in their life but in a different position. In conclusion, I would say it’s not just
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or just
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,
children
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must learn from both of them,
parents
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teach the first necessary thing and
school
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teach a second thing and to start
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team working, so both of them are important for
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to become a good member of society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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