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Some people say that the Internet is bringing people together by making the world smaller. Do you agree that the Internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

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Since its invention, the
Internet
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 has affected the
way
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people
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 communicate. Some argue that its influence on the
way
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 we communicate is largely negative.
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, I believe that the
Internet
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 has greatly increased the possibilities for interaction. One
way
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 that the
internet
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 facilitates
communication
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 is that it allows organisations to transmit
information
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 quickly and effectively to the public. In the past, it was often difficult to find
information
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 about organisations and
this
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information
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 could not be easily changed and updated.
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, since the advent of the
internet
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, most professional organisations and media companies now have their own websites, where events and
information
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 are available to anyone with an
internet
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 connection and the
information
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 can be constantly updated.
This
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 means that accessing accurate
information
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 about companies and communicating effectively with the public has become a lot easier. The
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internet
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 has
also
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 facilitated
communication
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 between individuals. Prior to the
Internet
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 age, the only main
way
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people
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 communicated in writing was by sending letters. Now, with the invention of
internet
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-based email and a range of social media applications,
communication
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 is fast and cheap. Messages and emails are sent and received instantaneously,
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so
people
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 can keep in touch on a more regular basis.
Moreover
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, these communications can be received anywhere that a person has a suitable device and an
internet
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 connection, as opposed to letters which can only be received at a fixed address. In summary, it can be seen that the
Internet
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 has had a positive effect on
communication
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 by giving
people
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 the opportunity to communicate more easily and frequently with others.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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