Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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who tend to use alternative medicines and treatments are increasing, and they less resort to visiting doctor and using professional treatment.
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situation.
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of medicine may damage the body and in some cases not only can not help the improvement but
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leads to long term horrible effects.
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some pills
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a kind of pill or diet irrespective of
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principles.
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a victim of pills and they should pay twice after that.
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and simple cold, if
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had these diseases and got some feasible advice from their doctor, they could use alternative treatments.
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money and time for them in process of curing. To conclude,
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increasing. In some conditions can consider
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phenomenon positive development. As mentioned, saving money and time and faster and
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another side, using medicine and
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of awareness from doz of them lead to calamitous consequences.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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