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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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There are a great number of
people
 choosing to start a
business
 on their own rather than be employed in companies. There are reasons that explain why many dwellers tend to be self-employed and abandon working for other businesses,
this
 may bring drawbacks for themselves. On the one hand, Choosing to start a
business
 by one's self may bring merits to that individual for many ways and reasons.
For example
, if a undergraduate or postgraduate makes a plan for starting up a
business
, he or she ,whether leading it to success or not, may gain experience gathered from that person's project to create a bigger plan for greater
business
.
This
 help that individual obtain more opportunities to develop oneself and the forthcoming project while still going to school.
However
, being self-employed,
in contrast
, may be an obstacle that holds back
people
 to be more mature and fully self-developed or even prevent students in colleges to have better academic performances since they cannot handle the workload of their own businesses.
As a result
,
this
 cost an enormous amount of money spent on one's
business
 while it should be spent on other activities that may be more beneficial.
On the other hand
, compared to self-employed, working for a company may be more advantages than the self-employed
people
 since many individuals that choose to be employed in workplaces may have more chances to easily gain knowledge and experiences from their employers or co-workers and the self-employed may not have that many opportunities as they have a lonely beginning.
Additionally
, individuals who set up their organisation on their own may face many problems
such
 as struggling in raising funds for their businesses or misleading it in an inappropriate way because of not having any guidelines from the experienced ones. On the opposite, with advice from their co-workers and their employers, many employees will highly have chances to be promoted to a top-notch position and have better earnings to spend on their own projects if they save up enough. In conclusion, even though it is good to be employed by themselves, still, it has many unexpected drawbacks whether
people
 choose to develop their future careers
this
 way
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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