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The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashion. The new fashion will be to have several other career or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Discuss both views and give your opinion with relevant examples.

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a
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odd
career
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 is becoming an old fashion.The new fashion will be to have more than other
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career
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careers
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 or more ways of
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earning
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earring
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earning
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 money and
farther
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further
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 education will be anything that continues throughout life.I will discuss both views.As far as my opinion is concerned, people who
having
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 a single
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is
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 better than others.
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 with, a single
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it
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has many advantages as
compare
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 to several careers because
on
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one
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career
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 you can focus only on it.I will give you the example of Microsoft they have worked only on
one
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 thing and now
world
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 knows Bill Gates Paul.He was
fouced
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focused
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 goal.His aim was to become
richest
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 person in the world and he worked on only
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 thing
not
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 on several goals.
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, people who
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 many careers in their life can struggle in their different careers because they have to
focused
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 on each
career
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 which may damage their all
career
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 focusing on
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caree
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career
care
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