You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work

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Dear Sir/ Madam, Hope

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letter finds you well. I am Peter who is

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student from Class A

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and be arranged to live in room 123, ABC College hostel

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last

month. I am

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writing

wirting

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writing

this

letter to express some issues from

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arrangement and

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find it is

compelcated

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complicated

to solve the problems.

First

of all, my

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roommate

rommate

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roommate

is used to

sleep

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very late, and he always plays music or movie very

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loudly

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loud

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even makes noise until midnight.

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makes me can not sleep well, and be not able to concentrate during classes.

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brings

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some

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to our rooms and they usually stay for a long period of time.

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me feel

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and lose

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privacy

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have tried to talk with him, and figure out how we overcome

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situation. I asked him to reduce the noise and don't bring

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to our room, but he ignores me all the time. I hope I can be arranged a new room as soon as possible. Thank you in advance for your help, and feel free to contact me if you need any information. Looking forward to your

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. Kind regards Peter Chan

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0Word repetition
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8 paragraphs

204 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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