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Many things that used to be done in the home hand by hand are being done now by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages.

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In recent times, advancement in home technology has become a prominent part of an individual's life. The main advantage is that it would save
people
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 valuable time and the main drawback is that it can affect an individual's physical health. In
this
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 are a crucial role in communities' life because it makes easier an individual's work. There are various types of
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 for
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such
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 as washing
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, dishwashers and sewing
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, etc. The reason is
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 for busy schedules and the main advantage is that it would help to time save because
people
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 can do lots of work at the same time.
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, research shows that 50% of
people
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 in the world use electronic devices
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work
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to work
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 at home.
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, another merit is that it would aid reduce
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the wastage
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 of resources. as
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,
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a dishwasher
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 helps to reduce
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the wastage
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 of water compared with hand washing.
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, the main disadvantage of
this
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 phenomenon is that it can negatively affect an individual's well-being compared with past
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. Using excessive
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machines
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 for
housework
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,
they
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can reduce
physical
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the physical
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 activities of
people
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.
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,
people
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 become face health issues.
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, research shows, that
people
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 who use
machines
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 for
housework
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 that
people
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 have faced obesity. In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic, using electronic
machines
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 for
housework
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 has several merits. It is
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 an important part of human life.
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, it has
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 bit of disadvantages. It can use the right method before implementing it.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • precision
  • repetitive
  • tedious
  • job displacement
  • job opportunities
  • skilled labor
  • unskilled labor
  • manual tasks
  • technological advancements
  • impact
  • productivity
  • workforce
  • workplace
  • equality
  • dependence
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